I’m hoping you can see my comments in the pdf file. Please let me know if not. Do note that while you use a lot of big language, there is not a lot of substance to the content. In your paper, you will need to provide specific examples and evidence from the primary source (as well as textbook, lecture, or other primary sources) so support your statements. Otherwise, it will remain too broad and vague.
I attached the paper, the PDF with the comments and the picture with his message.
